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I finalllyyy finished one of those alphabet fic prompts from ages ago. 200 words.

Angie, this one is for you.

M is for: mirror, TWW, CJ/Toby

(women don’t get older) just a deeper shade of red

A/N: title lyric by Melissa Manchester. Thanks to Luna for looking it over.

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She will be applying make-up in front of the mirror, while your teenage daughter watches from the edge of the bathtub.

Molly will see you in the doorway and give you that look, the one she somehow inherited from her mother and CJ. When you don’t leave quickly enough, she will wave her hand at you.

You’ll smirk a little and retreat to the living room, where Huck will be playing video games on the big-screen tv.

When she appears in her deep red dress, Huck will wolf-whistle as Molly makes her turn around. You’ll relay your appreciation with a nod, before walking over and offering your arm.

Dinner will be a romantic cliché and when the song starts to play, you’ll rise and ask her for this dance.

She’ll raise her eyebrows and say, “Strange choice. You trying to tell me something?”

You’ll reply, “Just be patient,” as you pull her close and feel the laughter rumbling in her chest.

As the lyric nears, you’ll lace your fingers with hers and hold her gaze. She’ll bite her lip as she hears it, and the blush will spread across her face.

You’ll think it’s the most beautiful she’s ever been.

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Aww! This is wonderful, and as always, its so great to see you writing.

Beautiful. :)

Thanks, Hon. The muse is annoying erratic, but glad to get this little thing out.

Beautiful realization of the prompt, Kat.

It feels very much in Toby's POV, too, especially with the dryly sarcastic comments like how dinner is a 'romantic cliché' and how Molly must have inherited 'that look' from Andy and CJ. Heh. Funny.

I love the mystery of the song lyrics.

I love the image of the two of them dancing, CJ's blush, Toby's gaze (he does do that so well *GRIN*), and the final line completes the piece so nicely. And the title is gorgeous.

*applauds* Well done! So glad to see you writing, too. That's wonderful.

P.S. I think there's one quick typo near the end of the piece, in the sentence about her biting her lip as she hears the lyric. It says 'bit' instead of what I think should be 'bite'? Yes, no? Just wanted to point that out. Hope that's okay.

I'll reply to the rest later, but thank you so much for pointing that out! *blushes* I read over it so many times... Fixed now.

Thank you so much, Hon. I just wish I could write more. Had the first two paragraphs for quite a while and knew generally where it was going, but damn it was hard getting it there. I so wanted to try 2nd person future tense.

I was a little worried, Toby pov is difficult. The line about Molly's look is my favourite.

I've associated the title lyrics with CJ for quite a few years, so very glad I finally had somewhere to use them. (and it may or may not be the lyrics that Toby wanted her to listen to. the rest of the song doesn't fit ;))

Lovely.

Thank you, Sis :)

I ADORE this, Kat! Thank you so so much. I love the glimpse into the future and the established (and plausible) family relationships. And how their relationship seems so shiny and new and... glittering.

Thanks you!

*weeps*

Glad you like it, Hon :)

I've had the first two paragraphs for quite a while and knew generally where it was going, but damn it was hard getting it there. I so wanted to try 2nd person future tense.

I really loved that look of Molly's :) And I've associated the title lyrics with CJ for quite a few years, so very glad I finally had somewhere to use them.

Aww, adorable. I love them. Also I love the style of this piece, flows really nice.

Thank you! I have quite a love of 2nd person, and wanted to try future tense with it. Glad it worked.

This was just gorgeous. I can see CJ's blush and the smirk Toby would be sporting in response. I also really love the visual of Molly on the tub watching CJ get ready.

Wonderful to read something from you again!!

It's nice to finish something! Thank you, Hon.

Molly watching CJ get ready and her look is what I love best. And finally getting to use those title lyrics, I've associated that with CJ for a long time (though the rest of the song doesn't match).

I miss stuff like this so much. Beautiful, Kat. I'd like to think the twins will turn out like this too.

Thank you, Hon. I wish I could write them more.